No one's offering any advice... I'm vaguely dissatisfied; it needs some fine-tuning. The toning turned out a bit messy. This is a montage of two shots with different focus settings—on the branches and on the character. I didn't shoot with a tripod, so aligning them was quite difficult.
The conflict between white... I don't know if it's good or bad, intentional or accidental. On the one hand, it suggests the artificiality of the scene, even the mountains of sugar sand, while on the other, the background appears detached and random.
This vegetable raises more questions for me. Perhaps because it's present in almost all still lifes. Some kind of cult vegetable... Appropriate in some places, completely out of place in others. Who is it depicting here and what is it doing? You could put a dumbbell, a brick, a sandwich in this place—the feeling would be the same—foreign and out of place in the frame. I agree with Viktor about the yellow snow-granulated sugar, especially when the background is white and blue snow...
Igor Kozlov (adam_k), You said it right: here he is DEpicting SOMEONE AND DOING SOMETHING. I don't think a dumbbell or a brick could have played that role. I'm trying to make the viewer see him as a character, and the whole point of NMV is that it's "realism," although essentially nothing would have changed for the viewer if it were a 3D-modeled fantasy figurine. There is such a trend in photo-related work - so I'm aiming for something NOT from the realm of classical still life, where vegetables blend seamlessly with flowers and dishes. It's present in almost all of them - you see, it's a purposeful series. As for the snow, I can't imagine what I was supposed to do with snow that's blue in the shadows and yellow in the sun. Maybe you could give me some advice? That's what I asked for.
Igor Kozlov (adam_k), don't ask what these stands provide, but suggest cropping. What do you think, maybe like this? - View crop . I tried it, it seemed too bare and sterile to me, I wanted to leave the "scene". View crop - I'm inclined to this. I ask you to seriously communicate your thoughts regarding comment #7, this is VERY important to me.
Valentin Zakharov, then we need a sense of mystery throughout the entire atmosphere, both in the lighting and the content... but, again, this subject and composition are very simple... and the vegetable resembling a bird is just a vegetable resembling a bird. There's no photographer's work here... almost like a point-and-shoot... And the yellow snow could have been removed in post-processing or the white balance could have been set manually...
As for the snow, I can't imagine what I was supposed to do with it, which is blue in the shadows and yellow in the sun. Maybe you could give me some advice? That's what I asked for.
It's up to the author what to do with it... after all, there could be a red wall nearby, which would give the viewer pause, wondering why the snow is red... To me, the snow looks like sugar, which perhaps plays into the frame with its imagery and cartoonish quality.
There are no photographer's works here... almost like a "point-and-shoot"
maybe it looks like that... it's a pity, it was really hard for me... you can't turn around much on a fifty-centimeter Khrushchev-era balcony, it just didn't work out and it's a miracle that I was able to compose it, I cursed this kindergarten and all these Christmas trees on the salary, it seemed I squeezed the maximum out of the possible, shivering from the frost... and that the sun came out a couple of times... . On the contrary, I thought the work of warm and cold on the snow was interesting, it was a pity to send it in black and white, removing the yellow is easy, but I didn't think that it interferes.
Igor Kozlov (adam_k), no need to apologize. I also think that if it looks like a point-and-shoot, then no one cares how much effort it took. "Mystery in the whole atmosphere" is certainly easier to achieve in the studio, but I'm tired of the studio sterility, I don't feel like adding backgrounds at all, so I tried crawling out into nature - I'm not happy with the location myself, I wrote that it was a working option, so a BIG THANK YOU to everyone who isn't lazy to comment
The blue background was fine; it's a normal process; the further you go, the more blue it becomes. The snow on the PP was a bit disconcerting. It seems the bonsai is alive; for snow to settle in the pot like that, it must be outside during a snowfall. What kind of monster would freeze a deciduous bonsai in the cold? There's no snow on the trunk. Confused. I was more confused by the aerial roots—they're creating chaos. And the brickwork won't work here. It's all about living things. The stands create the feeling of a miniature courtyard. Overall, I liked it. After the criticism above, it seems the PP is too blue.
ash, alas, the bonsai is dead, the vulgar hydrangea (dry) is stuck on the trunk of a privet. It's a pity, but there was no snow on the trunk. I agree about the roots, and so does ZP, but the
stands create the feeling of a miniature courtyard
a vegetable that resembles a bird is just a vegetable that resembles a bird
- the same can be said about 90% of landscapes and girls - just a girl pretending to be thoughtful and waiting for the word "attention". Another thing is that most people will be more interested in even an averagely photographed girl than the most super-professional still life, and this is normal. After all, these are just dishes, flowers, etc. I have been working in a studio for many years, including taking pictures of girls, often pretty, often smiling nicely and not even looking into the lens, often the composition is successful and the studio lighting lies well... but for some reason I don’t feel like showing them to me, maybe they are not stunning masterpieces, or maybe they are "just a pretty studio girl" It doesn't seem interesting to me... I agree that this work isn't exactly brilliant, but it still seems interesting to me, at least for the variety.
Valentin Zakharov, it's good when you don't stand still, but are in an eternal search=) View crop I somehow like it more (the connection of curved lines, so to speak)
granddaughter, I don't know, I'm not sure... they don't seem to be arguing... it's just that the background of my hometown detracts from everything... mount a clean horizon line with a lone tree - they would say it's cool Igor Kozlov (adam_k) is right - "the whole atmosphere needs mystery". Such glitches don't show up in daylight
What a fascinating piece!!! It's like a child's excitement to come up with something similar, using the materials around us. True creativity is always contagious. I really liked it: the sugary snow, the tree accidentally caught in the snow, and the bewildered fairytale character who crawled out into the sun to bask, only to find—oops—a pile of snow, and some strange footprints. The only thing I personally miss is some kind of plank or ladder for this amazing character to use to arrive at the scene. It seems like he doesn't have wings, so how did he get there?
Who is it depicting here and what is it doing? You could put a dumbbell, a brick, a sandwich in this place—the feeling would be the same—foreign and out of place in the frame.
I agree with Viktor about the yellow snow-granulated sugar, especially when the background is white and blue snow...
And the yellow snow could have been removed in post-processing or the white balance could have been set manually...
The snow on the PP was a bit disconcerting. It seems the bonsai is alive; for snow to settle in the pot like that, it must be outside during a snowfall. What kind of monster would freeze a deciduous bonsai in the cold? There's no snow on the trunk. Confused. I was more confused by the aerial roots—they're creating chaos.
And the brickwork won't work here. It's all about living things.
The stands create the feeling of a miniature courtyard. Overall, I liked it.
After the criticism above, it seems the PP is too blue.
splits into two: View crop and View crop